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Beneath the Mire by CeallachConri Beneath the Mire by CeallachConri

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A Short Story taking place during and within the world of a novel project I have been working on and have been toying with a title for.

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:icontheuniverseofdea:
Unfortunately I'm not too good at giving constructive criticism, but I'll do my best. I honestly enjoyed this short story, but I found it difficult to get into. Once I did, however, I was enthralled to keep going. There is certainly a universe here with layers and depth and that truly is commendable. I enjoyed the descriptions and the antagonistic presence of Cyrus and Hugo, once I understood more of what was happening. I feel like the simple fact that you have a universe fleshed out in your head so well is more than half the battle and I certainly applaud that.
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:iconceallachconri:
Thank you so much for the input and the compliments. I agree that I have a bit of a time trying to get things out there because of the amount of info I have in my head for it and how much of that translates to page. I hope you give Haxprocess and Death Whispers a try as both of those exist and interact in the same world.
Thanks again
Conri
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:icontheuniverseofdea:
I'll definitely give 'em a go when free time rears its head.
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